<p>Background: Too lengthy. This should be drastically reduced to pay more attention on the methods and the results.</p><p>Methods: Does not state the sample size, baseline/endline and timeframe/duration &nbsp;at the various stages of the study, i.e Pre-intervention, intervention and post-intervention. What was the duration of the intervention?</p><p>Results: Can add a few baseline result, not just compare data. Also include data on the basic demographic information i.e age and sex of the participants</p>